Afterbirth Draft Piece Feedback

Work includes the following (raken from the AS portfolio schedule):
Mood Boards
Examples of other texts/style models
Analysis of magazine covers
Title of product (can be a working title)
25 word pitch
pitch feedback (not on blog)
Shots of work on magazine cover including photo shoot
Complete mock version of cover/ contents page/ double page spread and draft article

Comment:
Genre of magazine is not clear. Cover star (he looks too polite.) needs to really look the part. Also colour scheme is a bit dull and wishy washy. It needs to have more impact. Font is very good though. Need to establish a clearer link between research and end product. Add price/date/issue number. Must include a variety of shots across the pages.
look at your research examples for contents + double page spread and see what you can use. try a few layouts ( and post them) Also do the same for colour pallettes.

Research/Planning level: 3
Practical Draft level: 2